The poetry isn't bad. However, I'm not basing my review on it.
As for the audio, I think there is potential for something emotionally resonant that projects vivid and immersive imagery. Unfortunately, the song's production seriously gets in the way of this. It has a lot of distortion in it and the mid-bass is overpowering, to the point where it drowns out all the other sounds an is irritating to have on repeat. You uploaded this as a loop, and as such, it has to be easy enough on the ears to warrant listening multiple times in a row. I recommend changing the mix so it's not distorted by lowering the volume within your software. I'd also recommend some EQ to reduce the low-mid end. You can still make it loud with tools like compression, limiting, and normalization and it would be less painful to listen to than it is in its current state. I've said in my other reviews that the listener shouldn't have to raise the volume for their specific song. That principle works the other way, too.
In addition, There is not enough information in the description to say what you are trying to do with this piece. Poetry is what it is; poetic and free to interpret. That doesn't translate well in describing your thought process when writing the song. If I knew what you were trying to do, I may change my rating and review to reflect that rather than my own subjective opinion.
I want to like the piece; the dreamy aspect of it fits well with my personal taste. I just think the mixing, as it is, leaves a lot to be desired.
I hope this helps. I mean what I said constructively.
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