UPDATE: Thank you for clarifying what your thought process was.
I should have mentioned this before, but I wasn't sure your reasoning behind the title. I was hoping you'd clarify why you chose that as well.
Mixing-wise, I think the song sounds a bit dull in the high frequencies, particularly with the cymbals. I don't know exactly what you did, but I recommend playing around with the EQ a bit or use some kind of multiband compression, something that adds more to grab on to.
I hope you find this helpful. :)
Original 3 1/2 star review:
"I think it would be a good idea for you to add in your description your thought process and intent going into creating this song. It would allow me to judge how well I thought your intent came across in the song rather than simply by my own taste and preference. This could affect my rating and the feedback I can give you.
As far as my opinion goes, I like the piece. I don't think it stands out very much, but I like it. As it is, that's about all I can say.
More info about how I review music here: https://codefreq.newgrounds.com/news/post/1089806"